Q u o t e:
This day it's raining in Stormwind. The sky is almost black and the wind is strong, and even though its early evening the thick clouds makes its quite dark.
It's just one of them days where people hide in their houses, lights up a fire and gathers their children for a storytelling-moment.
Or if you are alone, the ligh-up bar in Old Town feels very tempting and inviting.
And thats exactly what Titika thought as well.
The young draenei enters the warm room and looks around at the crowded place.
A open fire is spreading a nice warmth in the tavern, and it gets even warmer as she walks up to the bar and smiles at the gnomish bartender.
"I'd like a glass of wine please, please miss. I need something to warrm myself up with, yo'see"
The draeneis white hait lays in a perfect wave on the top of her head and her dark skin is young and lacking any bigger scars. Her smile is perfect, but doesn't give the full confident of being honest.
The lady gnome pours red wine from the bottle into a perfectly clean glass and bows gracefully after receiving a good tip from the draenei.
This would be the first post in a Open RP thread, the opening to a unknown story that is supposed to involve other people.
What did I think about when I created this post?
1. Description:
My text is not long. Yet it involves alot of fact about the surroundings.
You can find answers to these question in my opening post:
-What kind of day is it, what is the weather like?
-Where does the scene take place?
-How is the atmorphere inside the tavern?
-Who is the bartender?
-Is it crowded?
-How does my charachter look like, and is there any hints of her personality in the describtions?
I don't have to write all this. I could have told exactly the basics of the story with only a few sentences; "The draenei walks into the bar in Old Town. She orders a glass of wine from the bartender and looks around the room."
This as as well an opening and invitation for another person to join the RP, but it doesnt give the feeling, doesnt give the information and atmosphere, and most likely will not catch anyones attention. Note though that there is no right or wrong in how do roleplay or how to write.
The Charachter:
What charachter will you be using? And what would make your charachter speciall, what gives him or her a personality? Try to involve that in your text somehow. It can be easy things like glowing eyes, a dark hood, a specific pet or an accent. Your fantasy is your biggest tool!
Spelling:
This is not the most important thing, allthough its very easy to instead of getting the feeling of someone's post , getting confused or annoyed by bad spelling. It's hard to create a flowing story when the reader has to read the sentences two times to understand.
It doesnt take long to read through the text you have been writing.
A tip for quick spellcheck is to copy your text into for example "Word" and use the spell check program there. If you use firefox it's even easier to install the spell-check plugin that checks everything you write directly.
Action:
I clearly miss this is in my post. You need some kind of action to open up a scence in where other charachter can attend.
What would make someone interested in my charachter? Why would someone that walks into the bar give Titika any attention?
For example, I could add this:
Q u o t e:
After looking around a while she founds an empty chair. Slowly she walks over to the table and sits down, looks at her wine for a few seconds before taking a small sip.
Pleased, she leans back at the wooden chair but to her surprise one of the back legs suddenly breaks under her, and helpless she falls backwards.
Confused she blinks her eyes a few times, noticing she sits on the floor. And that she accidently spilled her wine all over the table.
"Bugger... "
There is alot of ways to interfear with my roleplay here:
-She spilled her wine. Perhaps buy her a new glass?
-Help her up from the floor
-Ask if she is alright
-Laugh at her
-Give her a glass of water because your charachter misstakes her for being drunk
Reading:
Make sure you read other posts carefully. If a misstake due to misreading happends, it can too easily confuse the roleplay, and its hard to fix afterwards. This will most likely as well force the author to go OOC and explain his or hers recent post.
OOC:
Big No. This ruins the feeling in a very abdrubt way, and can most likely change the roleplay to a ooc discussion. Try to avoide it as much as you can!
Other:
-If you choose to be part of an open roleplay, then try to be part of it. Don't write somethng in a haste, and forget about that you actually took part of the scene. This lowers the quality of the whole roleplay alot and can in the worst case kill it.
-Try to invite the person you roleplay with to answer and act by action or questions. It's ofcourse depending on the situation.
-Don't power emote. As well as in game it's really annoyong for someone to get their charachter roleplayed for.
-Make the scene live! Instead of answer with "Yes, I do come here often...", answer with: The little gnome blushes a little and peered up at the elf. "Yes, I do come here often..." She smiles slightly.
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